Hidden in the cracks of your broken promises
Your true colors sweep through like a waking sun
Staining the sky bloody red-faithless
(Truth fades, love bleeds)
Peircing words knell in my head like a clarion cry
Every sound you speak defiles my heart
Resonating notes of countless lies
(speak no more, you've said enough)
~(CHORUS)~
Your heart grows- so cold and heavy
I'm much too weak to hold on now
Trembling- i lose my balance
Time shatters on the ground
-im letting go
-ive learned too much
Memories decay in the sands of the hourglass
Your not the same person I used to know
Looking Away, I let go of the past
(Youre just a stranger in my eyes)
A year breaks off of our future
Endlessly falling into obscurity
There's no need to speak any longer
(It's obvious that you never cared)
Your heart grows- so cold and heavy
Im much too weak to hold on now
Trembling- i lose my balance
time shatters on the ground
-Im letting go
-I know too much about you















Devious Comments
With a few repeats of the chorus, i could actually see this as a song, similar to the style of "the streets- dry your eyes"... I really do like it.
I think the ending fits in perfectly with the other all feel of the poem, and i like how it is repeated lines, with just a tad added onto the end. IT does reinforce the idea, of why you're letting go.
I think this is a piece to be truely proud of. I don't know how in heck you could improve it, so therefore, no critique, sorry.
But well done
izy
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*iZy
"suicide is a permenant solution to a temporary problem"
nice job baby, keep up the good work
love always,
mike.
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Check mah gallery...
your bitch
miranda
ps. had a good "band practice" last night?lol!
But, feel free, to add as you will.
been too long.
izy
--
*iZy
"suicide is a permenant solution to a temporary problem"
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'Staring down the barrel of a hot metal 45
just another way to survive'
Dani California
RED HOT CHILI PEPPERS
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